Betrayal Has a Name(a really short story)

A Woman's Face
Photography of woman’s face by John Rocha

 

Patsy swung the door open hard. Not caring that it banged against the chalky, white cheap wall of her studio apartment. Not caring that some friends and family were eyeing her with strict concern. She took herself out of there and fast needing to be the first to reach her friend Alista.

“Wait,” a firm touch and clasp of his warm hand, grasped her elbow as she tried to take that last step. Jonathan’s eyes roved over her body. A tingle broke through her, beginning from her arm where he touched her and pooled in her belly. Where warm, illicit feelings stirred.

She removed his hand quickly with a pop of her hand. “What do you mean wait?” She spat. “Let me go to her. She’s my friend.” Every word was enunciated, hard. Like each nail driven into wood. Meant to close the deal and seal the truth.

But they were both liars and Patsy knew this bone deep.

Now it was Jonathan’s turn to frown. He looked at the short, cute girl wearing the gray pullover hoodie and whose sweatpants never looked better on another girl. Her body was perfect and her small face even more perfect. Her lips always begged for his kisses. How is it that I ignored this girl in high school? Not only is she incredibly hot, but so sincere. “I think we passed that line two days ago- don’t you think?”

Patsy bit her bottom lip. Even had the decency to look nervous and guilty. She looked up at Jonathan. His eyes, were trained on her lips. Now she remembered. Never did he look into her eyes when they would all hang out together. He always looked at her lips. And when she spoke, he always backed her opinions. Her, Alista, Jonathan, and Coby were the best of friends since high school.

Jonathan dated Alista, the pretty pianist with the big, chocolate eyes. He dated Alista all four years of high school.

High school was over now.

Now, they were deciding on college, jobs, and ultimately if there really was a pot of gold at the end of relationships. They both knew they shouldn’t hurt Alista anymore. Alista has been hurt enough. By her family, this sudden accident and now this…

“We have to see her. She is at the hospital. I’m done with…with this.” Patsy crossed her arms over her small breasts, watching as Jonathan licked his lips.

What have they done?

What have they done?

Jonathan wrapped his arms around her. Not caring who may see them. “I told you before,” he whispered. “And I’ll say it once more. You have always been the one for me. Maybe if we tell Alista the truth, it won’t be as hard for her to take later.”

Patsy shoved him hard and made it all the way to her car door and was about to pull it open when once again Jonathan’s arms wrapped about her. She forgot how fast he was, being a former track runner and running back for their high school football team.

Her phone buzzed.

His rang- had a stupid ringtone.

Both rang at the same time.

She pulled hers out of her pocket. Alista’s cousin’s face bloomed all over it, causing a knife to stake its way into her chest.

Jonathan showed her his screen. Alista’s mother was calling him.

It is moments like these where it is inappropriate to think of the late day showers with Jonathan’s muscular, powerfully built body pressing hers into the cool tiled wall, grunting, groaning, praying her name aloud.

Or in the morning, with her body spooned with his. Excited and tortured by his teasing lips.The cries of near pain and ecstasy as Patsy realize he was indeed a very, very experienced lover which caused her to nearly lose her voice. Probably one delicious reason Alista stayed with him.

The reason Patsy should have left him alone.

“I want you, Patsy. Let’s tell them the truth.”

Cold prickles marched down her neck like ants. “I don’t want to take this call.” She swallowed. “I don’t want to tell any truths.”

“It could be bad.” Jonathan agreed.

This time it was just his phone buzzing.

Alista’s mom again.

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Stay tuned for the conclusion on Friday/Saturday! For more short stories visit My Flash Walk Fiction Page!

Copyright 2017 Erica Jean Smith

 

Anything More Than Now by Rebecca Paula

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Book Cover Design by Maggie Hall/ Blog Design by Ericajean, gold stars from complete-beauty-care.blogspot.com

If you are looking for a classic rainy day fiction starring college kids who want to make it in life who find love, but are confused about love, make love then get confused about it and somehow find their way, then book  is for you.

Noah has loved Reagan from afar for about two years. She chose his best friend-the popular Beau instead and eventually they broke up. Now Noah can have Reagan, but there is a problem.

She is known as the Ice Queen.

And he needs her tutoring services, but she is so wrapped up in finding her lost sister and comparing him to Beau that she treats Noah very cold, until one drunken night…

A very awkward, drunken night that leaves them both confused and yearning more.

My Reaction:

I was not a fan of how Reagan treated Noah towards the end. I find it self-pitying and nearly cold.

Noah was flawed but you can do nothing but love him. Both characters were complex     and I loved how it was set in rainy day Portland.

Unfortunately, I did not read the first book in the series(did not know it was a series at first) , so I am kind of biased against Beau. I don’t have a clear grasp on his relationship with Reagan.

In summary, this novel was decent.

Have you read a Rebecca Paula book? Specifically in the Sutton College series? Let me know what you think!

*Please visit Rebecca Paula’s website via the link below.

**eGalley received for free from Netgalley

Book Details:

Anything More Than Now,#2 by Rebecca Paula

Cover Design by Maggie Hall

ISBN: 978099073955

Before Sunday by LD Crichton(a wattpad review)

Sexy passion couple, beautiful young female and male faces closeup, studio shot
Sexy passion couple, beautiful young female and male faces closeup, studio shot

On the eve of her 21st birthday, Lola makes one wish.

To experience a love so deep that it hurts.

The next morning a gorgeously hot guy, Jackson Sunday, is sitting on her bed claiming he is the answer to her wish and he is her husband in the future…ten years in the future.

Lola questions the guy wondering if he is indeed psycho.

But then when she isn’t near him she is so ill, it breaks her down. And when she is around she feels right as rain.

Enticed yet? Read for free by heading over to Wattpad.

Could this be real? Is it true that he is her dream man and husband from the future?

My Reaction:

I sat up all night to read this. And folks who know me by my reviews know that if I am finished with your book within 1-2 days, then it was stellar.

And “Before Sunday” was as sweet as the cupcake Lola wished on and just as emotional. The anguish, the bitterness, the passion between her and Jackson is palpable.

There were small blunders here and there such as word order and tiny plot confusion here and there but it doesn’t matter- the story was delectable and earns five stars from me.

About LD Crichton

LD Crichton is a sought after writer who has written the only official One Direction fan fiction and she has over 62,000 pre-existing fans who love her works.

She has other books out that readers just gush about, so if you aren’t too busy you may want to immerse yourself in these beautifully broken stories about beautifully broken people.

Seven Nights to Surrender by Jeanette Grey (a review)

Image courtesy of Forever-Grand Central Publishing
Image courtesy of Forever-Grand Central Publishing

Seven Nights to Surrender by Jeanette Grey

Published by Forever(Grand Central Publishing)

Release Date November 3, 2015

*Book received for free from Netgalley

Kate travelled to Paris to find inspiration for her artwork.

Instead, she found a living breathing, work of art. His name is Rylan and he is going to show her all of Paris including the dozens of ways to make Kate weak in the knees while she is there- for only seven days.

My reaction.

Kate. My goodness, Kate has the soul of an artist and so I respected her for that. I understand why she sees  so deep and why she questions everything. Being in Paris and knowing little French could do that.

But she was skittish to me. Even after getting comfortable with Rylan she played innocent and she clams up at all the wrong times and rarely shares much about herself until almost the end but expect so much from Rylan.

And it was Rylan who stole the show for me. Handsome, well educated and charming Rylan.

I felt that I wanted to learn more about his own tortured soul, than Kate’s. He admits to himself that he is a “kinky” man and is used to using women and casting them aside, but the dam breaks for him when he meets Kate and has her for the very first time. I hate the fact that he hid some facts about himself from her, but I wanted to scream, “Come on you two! Say I love you!”

I think this quote sums up Rylan for me:

If he could draw, he’d paint her in ivory and pink and umber, looking exactly the way she did in that instant. Preserve her forever…”(Seven Nights to Surrender,eBook)

A nice read that paints love at first sight, just right.

Warning: Sexually explicit scenes

Review: ‘Holding Strong'(Ultimate, #2) is MMA Hotness

Holding Strong (Ultimate, #2)Holding Strong by Lori Foster

My rating: 5 of 5 stars

Book received for my unbiased review from Netgalley

Denver Lewis, an MMA fighter wants Cherry Peyton- the very attractive flirtatious blond he’s wanted forever. And one night at Rowdy’s bar, she pauses her flirting long enough to tell Denver, Yes.

And when they spend one passionate, hot night together Denver realizes he will not let go of her. But Cherry holds a secret. A violent one. And Denver must show her more love, more strength, and more passion just to let her know she isn’t alone. But the question remains: Does she want him just the same?

Lori Foster, author of the steamy Ultimate Series is a superb writer who has this unique gift for creating alpha males that are believable. So the book receives kudos just from that fact alone. The plot was interesting and the romance was so heavy it leaves you panting.

To be honest, Cherry got on my nerves until the last quarter of the book. It was understandable that she had a terrible childhood and had to suffer with a nasty, cold foster family yet when she kept turning Denver away when he wanted to help her- it made me want to scream.

Outside of that madness, if you are all caught up in the Ultimate series which I just learned begins with Hard Knocks, then you will be in for a bonus treat at the end of this book, featuring a scene from one of the MMA fighters in her previous book.

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Hope for Her by Sydney Aaliyah Michelle ( a review)

” The book was so amazing I did not care about grammar or any of that. I just wanted to know-will they ever be alright?”

My rating: 5 of 5 stars

*Book received for my unbiased review from Netgalley

Joshua Griffin IV is back from rehab and attending FSU under the hope that he will finish school and not be an embarrassment to his family name any longer. The drugs, the drinking, the parties- all of it should be behind him.

Enter ebony beauty, Carrington Olivia Butler from Texas;this is her first year at FSU. However the handsome guy with the hazel eyes has caught her attention. The two enter into a whirlwind relationship that is passionate and volatile.

My Thoughts

Let me get this part out of the way first.

The grammar and misspelling was constant and nearly made me stop reading the book. It was very distracting. I think this was an uncorrected proof so I will shut up about it now.

But I do know that the book held my attention all night long and through the day. I thought of Carrington and Josh while at work and the events that occurred in the book haunted my thoughts. The book was so amazing I did not care about grammar or any of that. I just wanted to know-

Will they ever be alright?

Carrington comes off as the black girl who had everything. In the beginning she seemed as if she would be sweet and shy and an understanding person. In some ways she truly was. However given Josh’s past I thought she would show mercy to him(even though he followed her around like a sad dog-I know. Creepy!)

Then Josh does something stupid. Well, there were many stupid things he has done but Carrington calls him out on it:

“I can’t help but notice a little similarity in your parent’s story and us and I don’t know. It’s kind of a lot of pressure. I don’t want to be your escape.”(Hope For Her: Sydney Aaliyah Michelle, p.152)

I know his father is rich and all, but what transpires in this awesome little book made me rethink my thoughts on Josh. He needs help. The psychosis of Josh is enough to fill a Psych 101 textbook. He is just that damaged.

But I think that this being a New Adult novel makes it so germane to many twenty- somethings who are in relationships but who have sordid pasts and do not have the right people to talk to. I think Sydney Aaliyah Michelle really shines with this book and I hope to read more by her. Such an emotionally touching book.

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How to Distinguish Between MG, YA and NA Books

Tired of hearing about the differences between Middle Grade(MG), Young Adult(YA), and New Adult(NA) books- and still end up confused?

Below, I have created some easy bullets to catch you up on what the major differences are between these highly popular books and even examples of books in each category. It is very important to know these current key differences because,

…writers who study up on the many key differences between MG and YA will be able to craft the kind of well-targeted manuscript that will make both agents and editors take notice. Pay attention, because someday your manuscript will be tested.” [Source: Key Differences Between Middle Grade vs. Young Adult]

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Middle Grade

  • Age is generally between 8-12.
  • No swearing at all(debatable), no sex.
  • Having a romantic crush or just a kiss is allowed.
  • Conclusion: Middle school stuff, or better yet, books without foul language and sex.

Young Adult

  • Age 13-18
  • These are your  Ellen Hopkins’ verse books, Bluford series, and Divergent kind of books.
  • You are appealing to an audience starting high school or already in high school.
  • These books tend to be angsty a little bit and has more romance, sex and language.
  • Typically First Person POV(point of view).
  • Conclusion: High school stuff.

New Adult

  • Age is still under debate. Typically between 18-25.
  • The characters are either out of high school or in college or trying to go to college.
  • These books can steam up the pages. There is really no limit on sex, foul language- anything pretty much goes. Hey, they are new adults, exploring territories so to speak. Here is an example of what new adult fiction really is.
  • The point of view could be either male or female and sometimes the books feature both points of views per chapter.
  • Conclusion: Just out of high school stuff or college stuff.

As you may have noticed, I did not include a page number count, which agents may require. That is still highly important, so visit those links I have included within the post. The main thing is to know what content is needed.

If you have any questions or comments please post below and/or share across your social media networks to other  authors interested.

Thanks!